5 February 2012, 9:02 am
Well, I'm 13 and I've had this story idea for a while now, I've already written the prologue. The protagonist is a twelve year old boy called Alastor/Alastair (Right now it's Alastor, but I'm considering a change) who was born with a strange condition where he grew exceptionally quickly, as in, by the time he is twelve, he is over 7ft tall. His mother died giving birth to him due to his unusual size and his father, unforgiving, dumped him at an orphanage. He was either bullied or avoided at school because everyone was scared of him due to his height, so he never really had any friends and most of the orphanage workers were too busy dealing with other children. His father was never found. When the story starts, he has been adopted by a middle-aged woman called Sylvia, and they get along well because she's a very kind person. They go on holiday to Japan in March 2011 because Sylvia goes to different destinations every year and the school is in mid-term break. They buy each other matching necklaces as souvenirs in a shop. Their holiday is ruined when the famous earthquake and tsunami occurs, and Alastair and his adoptive mother get killed, their bodies buried under the mud and rubble along with their necklaces. In a few decades into the future, his skeleton is discovered and taken into some science laboratories to examine as they believe he is an extraterrestrial life form, and his necklace, which just about barely survived the years, is also taken in for inspection. The shock of losing something precious to him as it is the last thing of Sylvia he had re-awakens him as a ghost, and he only has one thing on his mind-finding the necklace. During his journey searching for the location of his necklace along with his skeleton, he befriends another ghost girl who died of illness and re-awakened as a ghost right away because she never got to tell her crush that she loved him. She explains that she wandered to Japan as a ghost because the boy she loved who is probably a man by now moved there, but also that she can probably never rest in peace because he already married someone else and she, as a ghost, can't tell him her true feelings. Out of boredom and sympathy, she agrees to help Alastor find his necklace. On their journey, they come across a crazy man with the ability to see ghosts with a life-dream to break the force splitting the dead and the living, meaning that they would mix, and Alastor and the girl whose name hasn't been told yet panic at the thought of all of the dead who were killed for murder gaining the ability to come into contact with humans, they would wipe out mankind, most likely, seeing as they cannot be killed, already being dead. Alastor puts his necklace as second priority, first being to stop the man, but he has made friends with the ghosts who can't R.I.P without revenge, and so they have to try and do so without being erased from existence altogether by his army. I haven't worked out much else yet, but all I know is that the man does find a way to join the world of the living and dead by signing a contract with the grim reaper, who he also has the ability to see, who demanded his soul in exchange. The man agrees, saying that he would rather prove that he wasn't insane and the things he saw weren't his imagination and die than live alone. The man's existence is erased and the wall separating the living and the dead disappears. But the Grim Reaper, being more clever than that, in the end added some more to the contract seconds before the man signed it in small print, saying: Sixty seconds after the contract is signed, the dead will be wiped out anyway, to rest in peace. The girl, in the final sixty seconds, tells Alastor that her name is Elizabeth and that she would have been able to rest in peace anyway because she has fallen in love with him. Alastor admits that he also feels the same way, and they fade in each others arms. In the end, the group who discovered the skeleton of Alastor become rich as they all believe that they have, in fact, discovered an alien. The book ends with a couple who resemble Alastor and Elizabeth gazing at the stars and noticing a UFO. So, tell me, what do you think? ^^ Please tell me how to improve and I would also appreciate some more details on the earthquake that took place on Japan as I don't know much about it. Here are some lines from the first chapter, please give me your opinion: "A gloomy, overcast sky hung above the school as students spilled out of it, chatter and laughter erupting into the air. One figure stood out especially as it stepped out of the doors, a great fraction of the others having already started their journey home. The incredibly tall boy despondently followed, towering above the small groups of remaining children."... Read More »
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